Lim Wen Song
Blk 09
Singapore 909881
13 September 2017
Effective Communication Lecturer
Singapore Institute Of Technology
10 Dover Drive
Singapore 138683
Ms Lim Lay Hoon
Dear Ms Lim,
RE: The
Introduction Letter To Achieve From Effective Communication
I am Lim Wen Song previously from Temasek Polytechnic and
completed the Diploma in Green Building and Sustainability. I have chosen the
course to become a sustainable engineer because one factor that Singapore is
heading is the growth of buildings and constructions these years. The demand to
construct more buildings to sustain the population growth as well as upgrading the
existing buildings to green buildings to meet the standards.
Therefore, green engineers play an important role to support
and maintain these buildings for better efficiency purposes such as energy and
water and overall the long-term savings. Pursing this degree in SIT allows me to
be well equipped and ready to enter the industry upon graduation.
I can cooperate and create a communication platform with
others whereby it allows me to work better with my peers. I feel perhaps this
is the strength I have.
One weakness I faced in communication is the phasing of
sentences and words using English. I tend to communicate with my peers and
friends usually in mandarin. Therefore, I often got mixed up with the sentences
by translating from mandarin to English.
At times, I will stumble across my mind and hesitate the
sentence I wish to speak. Because I am unsure whether the pronunciation or
sentence structuring are formed properly, hence would take a longer time to
project what I wish to speak to my audiences. Therefore, the objectives I wish
to achieve from this effective communication class are able construct my
sentences fluently while speaking in front of my audience during presentations and
correcting the habit of adding Chinese to my sentences.
I hope from this learning journey from effective communication
, I am able to present myself better through speech and improve on my English foundation.
Yours Sincerely,
Limwensong
Lim Wen Song
SEM03 AY2017
Hey Wen Song! Good effort with gathering your thoughts into a formal letter. However do take note of the structure of a formal letter writing. It should be as follow:
ReplyDeleteLim Wen Song
FFM Street
Blk 9 #xx-xx
Singapore 909881
13 September 2017
Ms Lim Lay Hoon
Effective Communication Lecturer
Singapore Institute Of Technology
10 Dover Drive
Singapore 138683
You may want to leave one line in between each paragraph so that its easier to read :)
After reading your post, I feel that you know what are your strengths and weaknesses. However, it would be easier to comprehend if you give examples on how you portray your strengths and weaknesses. In the beginning of your second paragraph, you are still writing about your weaknesses. I feel that it would be better if it is in the same paragraph as where you talk about your weaknesses.
Try not to start your sentence with "Because".
Overall, I think I got to know you a little more through this post. Let's work on our weaknesses together and brush up on your communication skills. On a side note, you are only going to converse with me in english from today onwards.
Cheers to being a more effective communicator after this module. :)
Eunice
Thank you ! Roger
DeleteHi Wen Song!
ReplyDeleteYou have great interest in green building and generally is a good content. However, try to space out 1 line after one paragraph it will look messy and clumped together.
Be more confident when you speak to people in the future! Have confident in yourself!
Zhi ling
Ho ! Cheers
DeleteHey Wen Song,
ReplyDeleteGreat to know you better through your blog post, I could sense your passion for the course through it. However, by leaving a line gap in between your paragraphs would allow the reader to read better. You may also use more conjunction adverb in your writing, for example like furthermore, on the contrary and etc.
Last but not the least, don't be afraid to speak up. Making mistakes is also a good way to learn, let's all work towards our goals together!
Cheers,
Jason.
thanks jason !
DeleteHi Wen Song,
ReplyDeleteGreat effort on your blog post! I was once your junior in TP, therefore I could understand clearly your points on the growth of buildings and construction demand in Singapore.
However, personally I think that it would be better if you shorten the introduction and use it to elaborate more on your strengths! Be more confident in yourself and believe that you can do it!
Cheers, Shermaine (:
Cheers!
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